Friday, February 27, 2009

Kid Writing

While searching for a drawing to use for my last post, I found a story that my daughter wrote in kindergarten. Her school uses a curriculum called "Kid Writing." Every day the students were instructed to draw a picture in their Kid Writing Journal and then write a sentence or two about it. They were taught to write any letters that they heard in the words (phonic based spelling). Then, an adult (teacher or parent volunteer) helped them translate it into "adult writing". Once a child became an independent writer (no longer needed help to compose sentences) the teacher required more, such as a paragraph.

When I saw this story, I just had to share it with you. Given Jason's writing skills and his recent sci-fi vignette, it is quite apparent that the apple doesn't fall far from the tree! LOL! Most of the kids write about something that their family did recently, describe a beloved pet, or draw a picture of their house. Not our kid-- she writes multichapter stories!


(Chapter 2: The Curse of the Aliens)



Abby and I were on the twirling bar. The aliens put a remote in the baby's brain. He took over the baby and made the baby scatter buttons around the world. Karen came. She didn't know about the buttons. She stepped on one. A box appeared. I opened the box! I didn't know it was Pandora's box. And all the sadness and sickness came out.

And, to further demonstrate the power of DNA-- here is a poem our other daughter wrote in second grade. (Jason can rest easy that his genes have been passed on!)

Love is like a rainbow in my heart.
Love is red like the first rose of the season.
Love is orange like a skinny pumpkin that grows in my garden.
Love is yellow like the first stars you see at night.
Love is green like a fresh bunch of grapes that came from the garden.
Love is blue like the crystal blue sky.
Love is indigo like the night sky with bright stars.
Love is violet like the beautiful flowers I pick in the meadow.
Happy Valentine's Day

19 comments:

Charles Gramlich said...

Those are amazingly good. Wow.

SzélsőFa said...

It's amazing how much energy and strength can a kid put into his/her writing.
Great pieces, indeed.

Catvibe said...

Amazing Aine! You've got a couple of genius children on your hands! Precocious, highly intelligent and intellectual, poetic and imaginative.

Sarah Hina said...

Pandora's Box will get us every time! ;)

Knowing a little bit about your daughters (ahem), I love seeing the difference between their two efforts here, too. The poem is the height of romance and idealism (I love that skinny pumpkin, somehow...because it's capable of growing even bigger, I guess). The story is complex, dark, and surprising in the best sense.

Both are unique and brilliant. I don't think there's a doubt about it. And both girls will continue to surprise you as they reach for those first, yellow stars of the evening.

Thank you for sharing, Aine. These really made me smile. :)

JaneyV said...

These are so good. My eldest son is apparently an amazing writer but he won't show me anything he's done. He's fourteen - they're so secretive! His teacher raves about him. I'm not jealous - honest.

Both your girls show an amazing aptitude for language. I love that they're so different in styles. Small Son tells me stories very like you daughter in kindergarden. Thick with plot, packed with vivid imagination. Your older daughter's flair for imagery and structure is very advanced. You must be bursting with pride.

Just wait till one of them makes an astute observation about you and your personality!
"Oh Mom! You're soooo INFJ!"

jason evans said...

Thanks for showcasing these two ladies. :) (Of course, they'll always be chicken wings to me.)

I've been very blown away by Little One's mind and her powers of observation that transcend any memorization or regurgitation. She has an innate drive to understand things in a pure, directway. Not what someone tells her it is.

And when I read Big One's poem, I was really blown away for different reasons. I know they were required to write similes, but the images she chose show a depth of observation on an emotional, artistic level. Of course, that really suits her skills.

I don't know anything about trees or apples falling from it, but if I can encourage them in any way or give them gentle pushes, it will be my honor.

Great work, Aine!! You've embraced your mothering role in many exceptional ways.

Aine said...

Charles~ Jason and I are in awe, but then we're supposed to be, aren't we?

Szelsofa~ Kids can often cut straight to the essence can't they?

Catvibe~ Yeah-- we are in trouble...
;)

Sarah~ You should see the picture of Pandora's box she drew! LOL It is such fun to see their different strengths expressed. I can't wait to see the creations of your little Picasso!
:)

Janey~ You've got to be so, so curious. Maybe some day he'll let you read his work. But, yes, I'm sure you share that Mommy pride, too!

And, lord! I can just see the eyes rolling with that comment. Yikes! I hadn't thought of that one.
:)

Jason~ :D I'm just glad I have you to help with these chicken wings! We've got lots to look forward to...

Your law skills will be quite handy, I'm sure!

Ello said...

Awwwwwwww, that was so sweet and awesome!!! I love the poem!

Aine said...

Ello~ Thanks! I'd love to see Little One meet Angus-- but I'm not sure the world would be prepared for that... LOL

katcampbell said...

It's so exciting to see the best of yourself coming out in your kids. My writing genes skipped my kids and went right to my grandgirls.

Vesper said...

Wow and double wow! Fantastic!

Chris Eldin said...

You and Jason must be doing something right to coax along such wonderful talent!!! Both simply blow me away. What a nice pick-me-up as well---thank you for sharing!!!

I also read your post below, and never knew that. But it makes total sense. Boys and girls are different, and I wish we'd stop trying to make us all fit into the same box.


On a separate note, I came over here because I just finished reading a book by my favorite (adult) author--Richard Russo. It's his latest, called "Bridge of Sighs." It is about so many things, but really about the 'what ifs' we constantly ask ourselves. I don't think I would've appreciated this as much if I had read this book in my twenties. But at the age of 43, it touched so many different chords relating to 'mid-life crisis' and growing older. I hope you have the chance to read it (and Jason as well). I'd love to discuss it with you!!!

:-)

Aine said...

katcampbell~ It is so much fun! Except when the worst of ourselves comes out, too... :P

Vesper~ Thanks! That was my reaction, too!

Chris~ Aww, thanks! We are just so tickled that we get to watch these two girls grow. I'm sure you feel the same with Thing 1 and Thing 2! :)

Guess what?! You're timing was so perfect with the book recommendation. I finished reading "Looking for Alaska" by John Green just last night. So, I went to the library today and got "Bridge of Sighs"!! I'll let you know when I finish it! Your INFJ intuition is showing-- this sounds like a book I'll really enjoy.
:)

Chris Eldin said...

Hi Aine, YAY!!! I can't wait to see what you think. I hope you like it.
:-)

K.Lawson Gilbert said...

Aine, what a great story and a lovely poem your daughters have written. Yes, I do believe the apple has not rolled too far! Very sweet. Thanks for sharing. :)

Aine said...

Chris~ Just started, but I see possible INFJness in the main character?...

Kaye~ :) I'm glad to have blogging to keep a record of these years. Thanks for reading!

Jennifer said...

Aine, your daughter's poem is beautiful, and I think it says a great deal about her parents that "love" bubbles up and out of her in so many original and vivid ways!

Aine said...

Jennifer~ Thanks!! I'm sure that having a loving family helps, but I also see how personality shapes her thoughts. Nevertheless, it sure melts a mother's heart!

Thanks for commenting!
:)

Karen said...

Aine - Very sweet poem and I love the sci-fi story! I spent the weekend reading entries for our district's Young Writers contest. I love reading the work of talented youngsters and seeing the progression of their skill as they grow. You have artists and writers! How lovely.